I agree that her argument is quite effective because she uses many believable data; however, I don't think her intro is effective. Of course, her intro is really descriptive and emotional. It might be an easy way to get readers' attention, but I don't know exactly the relationship between her intro and her thesis sentence. Is there any other function like this intro? Except getting attentions. -Minsu Kim
I think her argument is effective because she uses a lot of credible sources to back up her claims and information. Although her intro is a little over the top at some points, I think it is a good way to start her paper- with own her experiences, and that helps to explain why this topic is important to her. -Ashleigh Saunders
I really hated her intro, it long, flowerly and doesn't fit in the rest of the paper at all. On top of that, we care figure out her topic at all. I think it really hurts her paper, if I didn't have to read it for class, I would of stop reading completely.
I agree that her argument is quite effective because she uses many believable data; however, I don't think her intro is effective. Of course, her intro is really descriptive and emotional. It might be an easy way to get readers' attention, but I don't know exactly the relationship between her intro and her thesis sentence. Is there any other function like this intro? Except getting attentions.
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I think her argument is effective because she uses a lot of credible sources to back up her claims and information. Although her intro is a little over the top at some points, I think it is a good way to start her paper- with own her experiences, and that helps to explain why this topic is important to her.
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I really hated her intro, it long, flowerly and doesn't fit in the rest of the paper at all. On top of that, we care figure out her topic at all. I think it really hurts her paper, if I didn't have to read it for class, I would of stop reading completely.
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